[prog rock] burr thistle thorn (mp3) production help?

[uncloned]

Two versions

Acoustic



Artist's description:
Scored for 3 voices, choir, piano, cello, dbl bass, violin, rock drum kit.

Contributors:
GPO, Pianoteq, DR-008, Sonar 7

http://clones.soonlabel.com/mp3/burrs-20090721-acoustic.mp3

With added electric guitar



http://clones.soonlabel.com/mp3/burrs-20090721.mp3

Lyrics for both

Burr Thistle Thorn

Words have no meaning
So questions no answers
Deep is the dreaming
Of those who were dancers

Moonlit and pale
Thistle and thorn
Whispered betrayal
Pierced by the horn

Trudging in circles
Round they dance
Burr, thistle, thorn
Each step in a trance

Is there any right?
Is there any cause?
As the wind of night
Without mercy it claws

Asleep is the dreamer
Asleep in the thorns
The burrs pile deeper
The nightmare is born

Trudging in circles
Round they dance
Burr, thistle, thorn
Each step in a trance

Decay upon rot
Withered tree bends
Swinging slipknot
Evidence the end

In time suspended
A place with no answers
The pain has ended
Of those who were dancers

Note each file is about 10 meg.

[Sam_Zen]

Enjoyed. Nice lyrics. Pretty interlude.

About the production (after one listen) :
- voice is a bit too dry. Could do with a tiny echo, or a bit of chorus.
- In the first half I preferred the acoustic one. Reason was the filter-movement of the guitar.
It didn't feel proper, this Wooaaw. Maybe Pow would be better.
But the guitar-sound became right in the part after the interlude.

[uncloned]

Hi Sam, thanks for the listens and comment!

This is in 7/8time - I'll look into mixing the two versions. I'm kind of partial to the solo - I actually messed up what I wanted to do and the rest I thought interesting.