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(Electronic) Indigo Mineral (ogg)
« on: July 21, 2021, 11:36:25 »
(outdated link):
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1lgi-Mj9ShF0T_PWNwZRUor-FgMWUvbJg/view?usp=sharing

new link:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1FKkbWMiIbGPdcikn1I3h-xTmu8XO-68w/view?usp=sharing

It's kinda house

So i basically redid this song over night bc i might have drunk a bit too much coffee or sth was bothering me... what i basically did is i tried add some bass and maybe more fitting instruments altho i doubt i found them, and believe me the mishmash of various melodies one after another was done intentionally still, it was kinda inspired by how i heard in some game soundtracks instrumentals don't necessarily repeat any part
Also dear Saga Musix if you still dont like what you hear then i might need a lot more practice and im not sure if i currently have time but at least i tried and i hope some other (professional) musicians could like it
« Last Edit: July 30, 2021, 21:32:53 by Vojvodinosaurus »

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Re: (Electronic) Indigo Mineral (ogg)
« Reply #1 on: July 25, 2021, 20:53:51 »
To be honest, this feels like you tried out a couple of different melodies, and then just glued them together into one long song. There's no coherency between most parts of the song (apart from the beat, maybe), essentially one part stops and then something completely different starts playing. It's hard to give tips how to improve on that, except that maybe you should learn to realize that something isn't quite right if you just made a different to a different part of the song and threw away all the concepts and melodies introduced in previous parts.
Apart from structure, this is also really missing in composition: Most of the time there is just one melody playing - no bass, no chords, nothing but a beat. While that can sometimes work when done deliberately, it's audible in this track that it wasn't done on purpose, as the track feels very empty all the time. Again it's hard to say how to improve on this - but do look at how other people structure their songs, how bass, chords and melodies interact with each other, and try to imitate that.
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Re: (Electronic) Indigo Mineral (ogg)
« Reply #2 on: July 26, 2021, 05:50:26 »
Thank you for the kind constructive criticism!

However i'm pretty sure i've done this all on purpose so i'm not sure how it's possible that "it's audible in this track that it wasn't done on purpose". I'll try improving once i find more free time tho

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Re: (Electronic) Indigo Mineral (ogg)
« Reply #3 on: July 30, 2021, 16:12:27 »
a new version of this track will be released soon so stay tuned!

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Re: (Electronic) Indigo Mineral (ogg)
« Reply #4 on: July 30, 2021, 21:33:23 »
new version released! link in first post

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Re: (Electronic) Indigo Mineral (ogg)
« Reply #5 on: August 03, 2021, 21:05:51 »
However i'm pretty sure i've done this all on purpose so i'm not sure how it's possible that "it's audible in this track that it wasn't done on purpose". I'll try improving once i find more free time
Yeah, I guess based on your comments on the other tracks it's maybe more a matter "didn't spend enough time on polishing". Stuff made in half a day is rarely polished enough to sound really good. My main issue here (also with the new version, although it does sound better in places) is that for me, a drum beat with a single monophonic melody isn't really close to being a finished song in my book. It sounds like a work-in-progress waiting for more layers to be added. But since you still seem to be working on that track, maybe they will come in the future. :)
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Re: (Electronic) Indigo Mineral (ogg)
« Reply #6 on: August 05, 2021, 07:04:36 »
Keep in mind this song and "gray imports" are still demos
i mean i released this track as a demo thinking it was at least about 87% complete
but i guess i'm still a noob musician :\

nevertheless, a friend of mine who is also a somewhat professional musician likes most of my songs so at least i'm still confident enough to keep on composing and improving :)