Not totally finished, and may be a while before it is, but I figured I'd post the unfinished version here for any comments :P
http://z0mg.myzen.co.uk/mp3/TheRiverOfDeath.ogg
Since its unfinished, I've added [UNFINISHED] tag to it.
So my comments will be unfinished as well. So far :
Good song, but could be made stronger. Quite narrow in the panorama. The drums-part is a bit thin with only one repeated sequence.
Close Sam, there's two slightly different drum parts, but they are very close that it might not be obvious. Please define 'Quite narrow in the panorama' ? :)
I must admit that I listened once, so a slight difference could not have been noticed.
With narrow panorama I mean that most sounds do have quite a centered position between left and right. Only some delays effects seem to come from the sides.